*THAT* slap - Jigokillers pt. 2

Standing before the Galactor captain, Ken stared him down.

“Preying on helpless women, you’re just a coward!” He spat before punching the bat like creature in the stomach. The villain collapsed slowly, the wind knocked clean out of him.

“Ken!” The voice he had been afraid of never hearing again.

He turned around. Jun was standing close, the three others behind her. Her eyes closed slightly in relief at her rescue just moments before the iron claw would have skewered her. Ken’s eyes widened in return.

SLAP

He back-handed her across the face. Hand still connecting despite the protection of her helmet.

“You acted on your own without receiving orders, Jun.” His voice cold.

Jun hid her eyes in shame; head turned away, arms crossed over her chest. Ken looked up, noticing the stunned expressions on the faces of his male team mates.

Faster than she should be able to move, Jun spun her yo-yo straight into his crotch. His hands moved too late to prevent the strike from colliding with his manhood. For a moment Ken remained standing, shock apparent on his features. They twisted as the pain ripped through him and the gasping air escaped his mouth. His body folded in half, his knees hit the floor, his head landed on the ground, the point of his visor dug into his chest.

Jun nudged his shoulder with her foot. Ken’s body slid to the side, his hands still wrapped around his wounded pride. Jun looked down at him intently, waiting until his pain-wracked eyes focused on hers.

“If you ever even think about bitch-slapping me again, not only will I use my yo-yo - I will initialise its electric current. Think about it, Mister Eagle, first name Hypocrite. That voltage through your testicles would result in no eaglets – ever! Am I making myself clear?”

Ken nodded, unable to vocalise. His eyes followed her as she turned towards the others.

“Comments?” Jun asked, an edge in her voice.

“Eight.” Jinpei replied promptly. “I would have liked to have seen some up close and personal action. You know, a knee, perhaps?”

“Nine. Liked the eaglet comment, but you shoulda bitch-slapped him right back, gave him some of his own medicine.” Ryu’s diagnosis.

“Six. You know how I feel about warnings. Should have just electrocuted the little swimmers,” Joe smirked. “That way there would never be any eaglets to grow into Eagles who think it’s still 1972.”

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And I still like it.

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Ouch, Green! As an Eagle I'm still hurting! ... just kidding! What a good writeup! I think, in this case, Jun didn't electrocute him because she wished that, some day, those "little swimmers" made their way to her desired destination!

In fact, we've discussed this issue several times in past threads! No one (I think) agrees with how Ken welcomed his female Teammate after having painfully thought of her possible demise ... not even us Eagles! Jun's inactive response had several times been reprimanded ... she almost acted as if she enjoyed being slapped, for goodness sake! What a humiliation! She knew Ken's character and attitude, and she may have been attracted to him, but that just not justify her lack of confrontation.

On the other hand, there are those other issues that can, by some way or another, excuse Ken's behaviour even if it was totally unjustified and exagerated! For example ... his trying to cover up his true emotions and inner turmoil, his maintaining his position as a Commander and as an example for the others, his pulling himself up after being battered up by RI, his realization of how weak he had felt and been after thinking he had lost Jun and trying not to portray this aspect of his to his subordinates. In past discussions we've also mentioned that this did not seem such an insult to women during those days due to certain Japanese customs which still prevailed at that time. Yet, there's no excuse for what he did ... in my opinion, he could have dealt with the situation in another, more civilised way. Looking at the bright side, Jun did return this slap and another with a greater one in the Gatch F series! Way to go, at last!

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Originally posted by green Um, I think I can give two reasons why she might... 1. So that when he finally works out what's what, he will always treat her with the respect she deserves.... And, of course, that little bit of fear will mean he will ALWAYS be good to her

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UW made a good point about why he slapped her - in essense when your emotions are put through the wringer, you'll react in ways you wouldn't normally.

I've seen mothers smack their child after that child has just escaped being hit by a car - they are just so angry (read: afraid) with what could have happened when the kid ran out into the road. They respond with instinct (to teach the child quickly not to put themselves into such danger again), not with the relief that you would normally expect.

I guess I should point out that this came from the reactions of the other three members of the team's point of view, not from Ken hitting Jun. I put myself in their perspective as if it were today. If I saw a team mate reprimanded in such a way, I would be rooting for that person to stand up, not to accept such a humilating physical punishment, and if for some reason they couldn't, then I would have more than just a few words to say...

As for the scoring at the end, did I mention there were copious amounts of caffeine involved? A 6 am start? Work on a saturday?

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HA HA! Loved it! What an awesome little snippet to run into while having my pre 6am coffee myself...

Both endings in BotP and Gatch were pretty insensitive toward the Swan:

Ken slaps Jun...

Mark let her captors go free, which I think is worse than a slap...

I do understand Ken's reaction, however... Green, you brought up the mum giving the kid a smack after he/she runs into traffic. Oh I have been there TWICE... and, yeah, call child services, Josh got a smack across the butt for it, followed by a weeping hug, of course... The last time he did it he freaked out an entire store of people as he dashed out of the door across a road and into the carpark. It was a definite "buy yourself a lotto ticket" moment as it is usually a busy road and there were thankfully no cars on the road at that time... I thank Buddha that Flash lived up to his monniker and flew off after him that time... (he was waiting in the car)... but I digress..

Of course the difference here is that my son is only four, whereas Jun is practically an adult. If he truly did it for the same reasons a panicked mother would do it, then he should have done as Jinpei suggested and finished it with a hug.

I love that you gave Jun the chance to answer to the slap here ... well done... The hynpocritic bastard runs off all the time, her response is perfect.

Thank you for this.... I totall enjoyed it!!

SJ

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Why do men snore when lying on their backs?
Because their balls fall over their butt holes and they vapour lock.

That slap -in fact, that whole scene- is definitely one that can benefit from some elaboration and reinterpretation, as Green and TJ demonstrate well!

I love these snippets into the slap and the BotP version. You guys are very talented... love it!

I've never gone into that scene itself in my own work, but usually focus on the aftermath. I don't write Gatch at all (although I have ventured there on one or two occasions rather poorly), but I tend to write the off-scene things.

In Dear Diary I focused on Mark's reaction to the scene at hand... but that's about as close as I've ever dared venture to it..

In Revenge it was more Princess' disgust at Mark letting the guy go free... Although I kindly gave Mark a viable "out" in that one ... just because I honestly cannot believe that after all he suffered and all Princess suffered, that he'd simply let the dude go. That always pissed me off when I watched it as a kid.

But kudos to you Green and to you TJ for sharing your work and your visions on this scene... awesome..

SJ

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Sighhh

Why do men snore when lying on their backs?
Because their balls fall over their butt holes and they vapour lock.

As long as Ken is a better father than RI, I think it'll be okay...

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