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GrumpyGhostOwl
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I think I agree in general with most of what's been said here.
Less Zarky-Sue. Maybe have him a bit more like Jarvis, as voiced by Paul Bettenay in the Iron Man movie franchise. I liked the way Jarvis could be a tiny bit snarky while still managing to sound polite.
The thing that always got me about Zark was the way he talked down to the audience and expected us to believe stuff that was either wildly implausible or blatantly untrue.
More character development. Absolutely.
More on the dynamics between the characters - if Jason really does want to be in command, let's explore his reasons, and for cryin' out loud, don't turn him into The Starscream. Jason's also the resident Snark Knight and we'd need to not only keep that but dial it up to eleven.
More backstory for Spectra. I mean, I get that in the original their planet was dying (according to Word of Giant Blue Chicken) and they needed to find a new home, but why Earth? In the BotP-verse, there are LOADS of Goldilocks worlds out there, so why not just relocate to one of those without going to the expense of waging an interplanetary conflict? We need an actual reason, and it would be horribly ironic if it turned out to be Russian hackers or something, but I can live with irony. (I figure it's probably tax reasons.)
As to the Mark/Princess ship, yeah, I get that, and military organisations have no-frat regs for very sound reasons, so if it could be played a bit like the Sam/Jack ship in Stargate SG-1, I'd be happy with that. Maybe they could get together at the end, only not off-screen like Sam and Jack.
Someone please hire a speech therapist and/or an oral surgeon and an orthodontist for Keyop. I mean that. Really I do.
Also the clothes. A couple of changes of clothing would be nice.
Finally, take Anderson's little glimpses of snark and turn him into the Snark Knight Mentor, bouncing off of Jason's Bright Young Snark Knight for a massive series-encompassing snarkfest. And for heaven's sake, someone buy that man a decent suit!
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This post has been edited 1 time(s), it was last edited by GrumpyGhostOwl on 01-02-2017 at 00:12.
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01-02-2017 00:09
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