FB, this is terrific! I remember when you sent me the outline awhile ago, and this has really turned out wonderfully. I am so involved with the characters, and you are really bringing 'life in the prison' home... i can picture everything happening, and I really feel for the people involved.
I am looking forward to the rest.
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Thank you. I made some adjustments to it and have now split it so I could delve into more detail. Hopefully it comes out right without being too OTT
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It's coming out right. It's horrific, but it describes what she went through so well. You've done an outstanding job on this one. Every scene is so vividly painted!
Fb your visuals in this are great, I get shivers at times from the treatment of the prisoners, especially in chapter 9 when she begins dreaming..you can sense her fear, and strength as you read it. She's finally admitting a few truths to herself and Sean...
You can see why she was a member of an elite team like G-Force.
By the way...you left me a cliffhanger with Chapter 9...now I'm waiting for Chapter 10!
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30-01-2008 07:52
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part 10 is up for approval and will then be added. Just need to finish a fic for Amy then will email it over to you.
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